I recently finished writing and self-editing my short story, The Visitor. I then gave it to my wife for her opinion.
Much to my dismay, the opening paragraph I had worked so hard on, did not appeal to her. She felt it was “too quick.”
Of course, being a strong proponent of a good opening hook, I disagreed, but since I sometimes fail to see the forest for the trees, I’ve decided to get some of your opinions.
I am posting the opening paragraph of The Visitor below, and–in spite of my last poll being a dud–I am asking you to vote below with your response.
The corn was waist high the summer Leroy Jenkins’ dog sensed the visitor’s arrival. The dog startled Leroy from his nap as it bolted into the field, growling and barking with a vigor Leroy hadn’t seen in years.